Yes (Some of the most obvious physical health effects of obesity include high blood pressure, type 2 diabetes, and bone diseases.)
Yes (Obesity may lead to high blood pressure. Type 2 diabetes is another health concern that may be caused by obesity. Finally, obesity can contribute to a variety of bone and joint diseases.)
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Yes (In conclusion, obesity brings with it an increased risk for a variety of health problems.)
Exercise: Brainstorm background knowledge for an introduction (Answers will vary, examples provided)
How do you define a "successful" investment? What type of investment will the essay discuss? How do you invest in people vs resources?
What is a stereotype? Are stereotypes always negative? Do stereotypes only impact racial discrimination?
What is the author's definition of a "poor" diet? What is the author's definition of "excessive" stress? Are these the main sources of attention problems?
Exercise: Give feedback (Answers will vary, examples provided)
The first sentence is unclear: Effects of what? Grammar sometimes obscures meaning. The summary needs to be introduced and responded to. The paragraph needs stronger transitions.