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Revising

1 Exercise: Revise a body paragraph

Read the paragraph and revise it. First, check to make sure all of the supporting sentences support the topic sentence. Some information may be better for the introduction or another body paragraph. Also think about how to add commentary between quotes as necessary. 

       Joan of Arc was a brave leader who was sensitive to spiritual impressions. “At the age of 18 she led the French army to victory over the British at Orléans in the Hundred Year’s War. She was captured a year later and burned at the stake as a heretic by the English and their French collaborators. She was named as a Roman Catholic saint more than 500 years later in 1920. Joan of Arc was a young girl and her bravery and actions to protect France were unheard of for a woman. Joan of Arc is one of the most powerful female figures in French history” (“France’s Great Heroine,” 2009, para. 1). She became one of the great heroines through divine help. “At the age of 13, Joan began to hear voices, which she determined had been sent by God to give her a mission of overwhelming importance: to save France by expelling its enemies, and to install Charles as its rightful king” (“France’s Great Heroine,” 2009, para. 3). 

2 Exercise: Check your essay

Remember to think about those same questions as you revise your own essay before you ask someone for feedback. 

Good luck with your revisions!