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Revising

1 Exercise: Check your essay

  1. Does the introduction provide the general information a reader needs in order to understand the topic?
  2. Does the introduction end with an effective thesis? Does it match the style of the essay?
  3. Do each of the body paragraphs begin with an effective topic sentence?
  4. Are the body paragraphs sequenced in a logical order?
  5. Look at each body paragraph. Do the supporting sentences support the topic sentence?
  6. Look at each body paragraph. Are the supporting sentences sequenced in a logical order?
  7. Look at each body paragraph. Is there enough development? Are there more details or examples that would help the reader?
  8. Look at each body paragraph. Does the concluding sentence close the paragraph logically?
  9. Does the conclusion paragraph start by restating the thesis?
  10. Does the conclusion paragraph have a suggestion, prediction, or opinion at the end?

2 Exercise: Revise for unity and development

Review this student paragraph for unity and development.

       Marriage has become a very controversial topic discussed and, although its significance, its value has been degraded with ways of thinking that newer generations would as well live is there is not a change of mind and bring back the real purpose of marriage. To illustrate, an idea like cohabitating is one of the examples how people avoid marriage for reasons that are not very well supported. For instance, the people who are cohabitating maintain this way of living to be free from responsibility in the case that things would not work; or because they did not find it necessary in the beginning, they keep it that way so they do not upset the applecart. This is passed onto children who observe the parents' behavior and lack of importance given to marriage. It becomes a tradition that children adopt later on because they did not have their parents' example, and eventually marriage has lost complete meaning in more and more families in the future.